由合肥市中小学外语教学专业委员会和合肥英之辅语言培训学校共同举办的“我为奥运狂 英语伴我行”第五届EF第一英语杯中小学英语能力竞赛自4月2日开赛至今,初赛阶段已经结束。为了考察选手的英文写作能力,初赛以作文的形式提交,迄今为止收到全市中小学生近2万份稿件,由于初赛的作文题目与奥运相结合,参赛选手充分发挥了自己的想象空间,写出了一篇篇观点独到、形式多样的英文文章。我社将选取部分文章进行陆续刊登,并邀请担任此次大赛的初赛评委之一Sean Og对文章进行了点评。
My Olympic Dream我的奥运梦想
When I was young I loved to run after the bikes and I really wanted to be a hurdles' player.
One day when I was sleeping it seemed that someone was shaking me. I was so sleepy and asked ″what are you doing dad﹖ I want to sleep for a while.″ ″Oh I'm not your dad and you have to get up now because we have to enter the competition″ ″Competition﹖″ I said and opened my eyes. To my surprise I found I was sleeping in a strange place and the man who talked with me was Liu Xiang the hurdles' player. I was so surprised and said ″Oh you are Liu Xiang aren't you﹖ Where am I﹖″ ″Of course I'm Liu Xiang.″ He said ″We are in the hotel. And we are going to take part in the Olympics.″ ″You and I﹖ The Olympics games﹖ Am I dreaming﹖″ I asked. ″Oh maybe you practiced too much yesterday you are so tired that you just said something so strange. But you should be quick or we will miss the game.″ I put on my clothes quickly and went with him.
We took a special bus to the Olympics field. On the bus I saw so many famous athletes like Yao Ming Zhu Jianhua Fu Mingxia and so on. We chatted with each other. After about 10 minutes we got to the Olympics field. Liu Xiang and I went to the hurdles group. It was the last competition. We had to beat an American player and Indian player and a Japanese player. We warmed up for about 20 minutes and the game began. I was a little afraid before the game because I ran so slowly and I was too short to surmount the obstacles. But when the game started I was so surprised that I could run so fast and I could jump so high that I could surmount the obstacles easily. At first I was the last one but soon I surpassed the American player the Indian player and the Japanese player. I ran faster and faster and I even surpassed Liu Xiang. The finishing line was nearer and nearer. ″Yeah I'm the winner″ I was the first one to pass the finishing line and I shouted with joy.
″Ling Ling Ling″ I was woken up by my alarm clock. Oh it's just a dream. I was excited but a little disappointed because I'm not the real winner. But I'm sure if I study hard and practice more this dream will come true someday
作者:牛维讘 科大附中 初四1辅导老师蔡传凤
点评:This young writer chose to write a fictional dream which demonstrates his/her ability to transcribe their wonderful imagination into an excellently written and creative composition.(这位小选手选择了去写一个非真实的梦想,证明了他/她有能力把他们的精彩的想象力变成优秀的,富有创作性的文章!)
My Olympic Dream我的奥运梦想
Someone told me /There was a beautiful country in Europe./The serene Olympus The shining rivers And the perfumed flowers /——all belong to the great place./Oh yes .She is Greece. /The first Olympic Games was held there./ Someone told me/There was an ancient country in Asia./The Great Wall /The pretty pandas/And the varied food/——all belong to the great place./
Oh yes. He is China./The next Olympic Games will be held there/Now he will have an appointment with she./
And I a normal Chinese student/Will help my homeland/To make a new face/To meet his pretty girl./You may ask/What makes them get together ﹖/Oh I will tell you/That's Olympics.
作者:合肥四十五中 九(2)班 孙暮雨 辅导老师:朱良富
点评:This composition stands out as one of the most original and creative we have received. The writer shows wonderful creative writing skills and makes some interesting connections between two countries and two ancient cultures who are to be united in 2002 by the Olympics.(这篇文章极为优秀(远远超过其他文章),是我们收到的文章中最有创意,最具原创性的一篇。 作者把两个国家, 以及它们古老的文化与2008奥运会主题连接在一起,写出了一些有意义的联系,展示了其非常高超的创作技巧。)
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